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Another Lovers Name by ~xxuglyducklingxx:iconxxuglyducklingxx:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


~Another Lover’s Name~

The wind whispers I love you
As you speak from far away
Without your voice to speak them,
Those words just aren’t the same
Then I realize you’re not speaking them to me
You whisper another lovers name softly into the gentle breeze
Looking in the mirror
I still see
The ghosts and broken promises
Of what we were supposed to be
The screams and scents that linger
On my never washed again sheets
They cry out your name
And I smell the innocence of love
I know I should let you go
But I can’t seem to get enough
©2009 ~xxuglyducklingxx
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Author's Comments

This is a little bit of an older one...and i never got around to adding to it..i might..but i think it rings enough truth in itself. hope you like it ^_^

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~black-laurel Jan 31, 2009, 7:34:45 AM
This has perhaps a sort of a "rough around the edges" -feeling (that is what I think), which leads to a raw sort of a feeling. I think it goes well with this poem and what it is about.

I like.

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~xxuglyducklingxx Jan 31, 2009, 8:21:02 AM
well.....you and your feelings...you go on ahead..yes its suppossed to in a sense rub you raw

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"If a guy can drive safely and perfectly simultaneously kissing a girl sitting in the front passenger seat, he is not giving proper attention to the KISS" :D
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*artisjustfrozenmusic Feb 1, 2009, 7:44:45 PM
I really like this!

Your stuff is all so delicate and beautiful, but still earthy and raw and guttural in a way. Very emotional!

:heart:

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Je Suis Qui Je Suis :heart:
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~xxuglyducklingxx Feb 2, 2009, 3:38:52 PM
Not all of it, but some of it and i thank thee for your comment And that's me for you i am a very emotional person..like Darren though i could never ever ever amount to his lyrical genius@!

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"If a guy can drive safely and perfectly simultaneously kissing a girl sitting in the front passenger seat, he is not giving proper attention to the KISS" :D
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*artisjustfrozenmusic Feb 3, 2009, 1:54:35 AM
Lol!

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Je Suis Qui Je Suis :heart:
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~murdock-matlock Feb 6, 2009, 4:22:57 PM
omg ! the only word i can think of to truely describe this masterpiece...delicious!

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"So you try to think of someone else you're mad at, and the unavoidable answer pops into your little warped brain: everyone."
— Ellen Hopkins
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~xxuglyducklingxx Feb 6, 2009, 5:06:43 PM
Can i ask you what about it that makes you think it's a masterpiece? And thanks so much =) that made my day =)

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"If a guy can drive safely and perfectly simultaneously kissing a girl sitting in the front passenger seat, he is not giving proper attention to the KISS" :D
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~murdock-matlock Feb 6, 2009, 5:25:40 PM
well just, the imagary was great, i just felt like i was being brought into the poem. most poems dont do that for me, just a special few. and yours was one of those ^^ so i say great work, a masterpiece

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"So you try to think of someone else you're mad at, and the unavoidable answer pops into your little warped brain: everyone."
— Ellen Hopkins
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~xxuglyducklingxx Feb 6, 2009, 5:31:26 PM
I try =) *BLUSHES* thanks.

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"If a guy can drive safely and perfectly simultaneously kissing a girl sitting in the front passenger seat, he is not giving proper attention to the KISS" :D
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